Monday, 23 May 2011

Lightly Polluted


He noticed, on leaving her
new house, that one couldn't see the stars as clearly
from this place.

Light Pollution.
Terraced houses watched her now, not trees.

He glanced back.

She looked diminished, almost ordinary in her new doorway.

Perhaps this was the perfect place for falling out of love.


50-word story and photo by Lisa Falzon
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18 comments:

  1. HOLLY23 May 2011 at 22:51

    Baby the stars shine bright. Just beautiful. x

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  2. Anonymous24 May 2011 at 07:14

    Fabulous!

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  3. Dell Smith4 June 2011 at 23:02

    Great stuff.

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  4. Anonymous6 June 2011 at 16:28

    I like how the words are pasted on an image. Cool.

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  5. Beans15 June 2011 at 06:19

    I dig this post. :)

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  6. Anonymous25 June 2011 at 00:43

    Well go on darling, how do you expect us to carry on without you?
    It's been over a month already.

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  7. Karishma Shetty19 July 2011 at 18:26

    Very effective. I like your style!

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  8. Tim Dorsey20 July 2011 at 13:01

    Yeye, he ain't worf the door frame framing 'im, blocking zi stars and all. i'd high-tail back, did ya get a read on the moon phase?

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  9. Anonymous8 August 2011 at 09:18

    Achingly powerful! You have such a fantastic way with words. I am always inspired to write on after reading one of your flashes.

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  10. Lisa Falzon8 August 2011 at 13:08

    Thanks for all the feedback :) Page210, do you also write microfiction?

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  11. Anonymous8 August 2011 at 14:48

    I do write some flash, but I go a little longer, usually between 150-500 words. If you stop by, I'd love some feedback!

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  12. Ruth11 October 2011 at 15:21

    Great! Just perfect!

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  13. Artsnark3 November 2011 at 05:38

    Havent been around in ages. Happy to see that you are still sharing your brilliant corner of the world :)

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  14. Kenney Mencher30 November 2011 at 20:28

    I like the Jenny Holzer/Barbara Kruger use of text. The pathos of the story is something I can also relate too and it went well with the image and the font.

    Really strong piece!

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  15. Unbelievable8 January 2012 at 23:04

    I absolutely love these, this one especially. Are they available for purchase? Printed on a canvas or something?

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  16. Lisa Falzon9 January 2012 at 00:47

    Hey Unbelievable!

    They will be available shortly as prints. Check out some samples here...

    http://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid=10150515271626081&set=a.10150491262296081.419906.89562696080&type=3&theater

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  17. Graham_Cliff20 February 2012 at 00:52

    Yes BUT polluted by light, apparently?
    http://www.lightpollution.org.uk
    And BTW - don't forget World Earth Hour (WEH) and the WWF, this 31st March 2012 - 6 years on from the first ever EH in Sydney, Australia - http://www.earthhour.org/

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  18. Unknown18 October 2013 at 14:58

    Hello Lisa - I've been trying to find a specific contact page somewhere on your site, but can't so am putting this up here in the hope that you see it.

    I love your site, your stories, poems and artwork are just the things that I'm looking for to include in a publication (a short story magazine) that I am currently trying to put together for UK distribution. If you would like to know more, could you please send an email to jwaldron05@yahoo.co.uk so I can discuss with you what I have in mind.

    Thank you very much - love your work!

    J

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