Friday, 16 October 2009

Gretel's Tale




I cradle your head in my lap. Youre' quite dead now, brother. I grieve now. I brush the crumbs of gingerbread I'd eaten off your face and cry. I only ever wanted you for myself my darling. That is why I kept you in the cage long after she died.



I cradle your head in my lap. Youre' quite dead now, brother. I grieve now.
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10 comments:

  1. mermaiden16 October 2009 at 20:59

    you are super creepy. LOVE IT!

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  2. elsie20 October 2009 at 08:10

    being hunted by a witch can do that to a girl...

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  3. Anonymous21 October 2009 at 16:23

    It made more sense after I read the title. Maybe I should be doing that first?

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  4. Lisa Falzon21 October 2009 at 16:53

    Hehe yes it is always taken into consideration that one would start to read 'at the top' and read the title. :)

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  5. Juz3 November 2009 at 10:16

    Greetings from South Africa.
    I love this one! Had to rake my brain a little to remember the original but I got there. Thanks for sharing your stories.
    Juz

    http://juztick.blogspot.com

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  6. Kleine Zwemmen12 November 2009 at 13:53

    does the title count as free words?

    ... it adds quite a bit to the story to know the girls name.

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  7. Lisa Falzon12 November 2009 at 14:44

    I have never counted the title words in my stories, but I title them all.

    Some people don't title their stories or pictures, but I always do. It is distinct from it.

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  8. Emily Cross3 January 2010 at 23:58

    Brilliant! I hope you've read John Connolly's Book of lost things? I think you'd like it alot :)

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  9. Carmen Bush2 February 2010 at 17:58

    Love the creepy factor! What about from Hansel's perspective?

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  10. Anneke3 July 2010 at 20:43

    Wow, I just discovered your blog. I was searching for micro-fiction. I love your stories. This one is very creepy, I like it a lot.

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